In the cave only shadows were envisioned
They were unaware there was light somewhere
The people in the cave were imprisoned
They had no sense of reality and what was fair
The prisoners in the cave were afraid of the unknown
They knew nothing about the outside reality
The shadows were the only things they were shown
They could not escape their own ignorant mentality
The freed prisoners were forgotten
They were able to find answers
To all the questions they had gotten
And live the life of a happy prancer
We cannot be a small fish in a big pond without any knowledge
But a small fish in a big pond with the education of college
Dude, really nice sonnet. I like the meter in which you rhyme lines AC and BD (rhyme every two lines). Very good and creative!
ReplyDeleteYour Rhyming scheme is awesome, nice use of creative yet appropriate vocab to tie your stanzas! It not only follows the sonnet structure but so to is it genuinely entertaining, nice work!
ReplyDeleteI agree with Hayden! Awesome job with vocab and rhyming :)
ReplyDeleteGreat job. Seems to me like you put a lot of time and effort . I like your rhymes (:
ReplyDeleteCan you please comment on mine
http://epereyrarhsenglitcomp.blogspot.com/?m=1
Great job and the effort put into this sonnet is clear. I am unsure as to whether or not you intended to write this in iambic pentameter, but if you were a few sentences could use a revision. Other than that it is a very good sonnet.
ReplyDeleteI think your sonnet is great! However I would revise the iambic pentameter if that is what you were shooting for. If not then ignore this comment! haha Anyways I think ir was very well written and a great sonnet to read! :D
ReplyDelete"We cannot be a small fish in a big pond without any knowledge
ReplyDeleteBut a small fish in a big pond with the education of college"
I absolutely love this apart! you are very creative. GREAT JOB!
please comment on mine. http://kporrazrhsenglitcomp.blogspot.com/2012/11/sonnet-allegory-of-cave.html
Amazing Sonnet! I can tell a lot of effort was put into it. Great Job
ReplyDeleteLike I said when I first saw it, this is really good. It is really poetic and to be honest, I thought you stole it from something before it was that good for a first time poet! Hahaha good job E'Ana. :)
ReplyDeleteIt's only cus I can rhyme like dr suess hahaha
DeleteI really enjoyed the flow of the sonnet because you told the audience who they needed to be and you tied it into the general reality for AP students looking for college. The couplet was my favorite part and I can only see that the iambic pentameter could be edited, otherwise amazing!
ReplyDeleteWow great sonnet! You're the first I've read that used iambic pantameter so kudos for that! It was well written and flowed nicely...great job!
ReplyDeleteI like how the last two lines make the sonnet relevant to the class of 2013. I also like how you focus on the ignorance of the prisoners. Did they know there was anything beyond the cave? Very thought provoking. Could you comment to my blog as well?
ReplyDeleteAmazing sonnet! Love the last two lines :)
ReplyDeleteComment on mine please
great sonnet!
ReplyDeleteI odnt have questions about the book so far.
my blog is:http://danig14.blogspot.com/
Great Sonnet!
ReplyDeleteQuestion: What is author's tone(A Tale of Two Cities)?
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